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Love the story so far and I like how you made it an AU with tsunade being married to Dan and having a daughter. It gave your fanfic its unique setting. However there are a few things to be said about your writing. While your ideas for the story are great, the writing done by the AI is not. The repetitive use of the word determination starts to get annoying the more you see it. I mean I already get he has it but at least put some 'human' feelings into the description and the reasoning behind it. Like you missed the part where mc needs to be shocked when he found he is an AU when he found the existence of Tsuna who shouldnt exist in the first place. The emotions of the mc is one dimensional as if he is a robot with 'determination'. This gets obvious the more you read. Besides your somewhat slow update speed, this might be the flaw I can't just sit and ignore. Other than that, I find the story enjoyable. Keep up the good work.

Naruto - Minato Namikaze SI

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