Review Detail of 7SLOTH in God of Crime: Strongest Mafia Boss
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I think this story is decent. Recommending anyone to read it and give it a try. I will mainly just be giving cons. Since i recommend the story. This means anything i dont mention is done well.To begin with, I think the prologue shouldn't even be there. It was my fault as well for reading it. It instantly just throws a scene from a part in the story we haven't reached. Giving us the info of a woman he will be with. Which we didn't really need to know. Next, I feel like the story moves slowly but, at the same time, has a fast setting. Meaning you describe too much and prolong moments. What I really don't like has well is how non immersive the story feels. compared to your other works. I love how you have a whole world built. Just the way you went about it was off putting. First, he is a student, and then the incident happens. Now, he is open to a new world. After he wants to balance his life. Next, he has problems come up. His views change quickly. Then experiences time skip in library. Making all this happen so quickly. It's not really making me feel grounded with the mc. Lastly, I don't like how easily mc gets things. I am usually one for op mcs. Just not ones that seem to go well at every turn. Sure, you describe how he agonizes, but it mostly occurs when just buying from his system. Buying things that change his body. Which I don't mind the system doing. It's just so easy for him to use the system. He gets points from doing good or bad things. That makes everything he does easy. As every scenario he is in, he still gets points. At the same time, he gets discounts in the store. Overall, this is just my opinion and what I didn't like. If you even made it this far. Hope you at least got something from this review. It kind of was like a rant. Which I don't usually do in reviews. I just see a lot of potential in this story.
God of Crime: Strongest Mafia Boss
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Thanks for the review. Firstly the prologue having a sneak peak in the future is not something new. In fact it's pretty common as it gives an idea about what to expect and something to wait for as the readers read while wondering "What could have happened so that mc change so much and get in so or so situation." But obviously this isn't something everyone would like. I can't say much about everything else as everyone as different opinions but for the fast change in circumstances it would be a mistake to compare it to SHK. Sol was directly born in a world where the Supernatural is Normal and at the highest possible situation attainable for a human. Basically whatever happens, short of throwing a literal tragedy his situation will only change from prince to king. Adam meanwhile started as a normal "Human". He lived a normal life until everything changed and now he is thrown in different incident that progressively change his situation. The time skip in the library is necessary as it's impossible for me to explain months and months of reading a book (Because that all he does.) In the Library aside from talking to Her he only read and it's while reading that time accelerate for him. You say things change fast for him but everything you said happened literally over 200 chapters đ . I am already going pretty slow I think so I don't know how I could go slower than this. It's impossible for me to describe every moment. About easy for this system I believe he never gotten any big boost easily. Every Chakra cost increase and no discount. I don't know how far you reached but if you went past 130 you would know how much he needed to do just to unlock the 3rd Chakra and how much more he needs for the 4th Chakra. Attention, I am not trying to say that your review is wrong and that my story is perfect etc. I am happy you taken the time to read it and review. My story is definitely not perfect and need much improvement. I have to work on my pace but at the same time I cannot focus too much on one event. There is only so much that can explained at times. Once again thanks for leaving a review and I hope you will continue to like my story.
I understand, author. Thank you for taking the time to read my review. I was pretty emotional based on this review. This review should be taken with a grain of salt. As I spewed things, I disliked and wasn't as objective. Regardless, keeping working hard. I think you'll be able to be full time. if you haven't already.
HIKARU_GENJI:Thanks for the review. Firstly the prologue having a sneak peak in the future is not something new. In fact it's pretty common as it gives an idea about what to expect and something to wait for as the readers read while wondering "What could have happened so that mc change so much and get in so or so situation." But obviously this isn't something everyone would like. I can't say much about everything else as everyone as different opinions but for the fast change in circumstances it would be a mistake to compare it to SHK. Sol was directly born in a world where the Supernatural is Normal and at the highest possible situation attainable for a human. Basically whatever happens, short of throwing a literal tragedy his situation will only change from prince to king. Adam meanwhile started as a normal "Human". He lived a normal life until everything changed and now he is thrown in different incident that progressively change his situation. The time skip in the library is necessary as it's impossible for me to explain months and months of reading a book (Because that all he does.) In the Library aside from talking to Her he only read and it's while reading that time accelerate for him. You say things change fast for him but everything you said happened literally over 200 chapters đ . I am already going pretty slow I think so I don't know how I could go slower than this. It's impossible for me to describe every moment. About easy for this system I believe he never gotten any big boost easily. Every Chakra cost increase and no discount. I don't know how far you reached but if you went past 130 you would know how much he needed to do just to unlock the 3rd Chakra and how much more he needs for the 4th Chakra. Attention, I am not trying to say that your review is wrong and that my story is perfect etc. I am happy you taken the time to read it and review. My story is definitely not perfect and need much improvement. I have to work on my pace but at the same time I cannot focus too much on one event. There is only so much that can explained at times. Once again thanks for leaving a review and I hope you will continue to like my story.
Don't worry đI like review like this as you were polite and simply expressed what you didn't like. Some readers can be very mean and insulting when doing review so I was happy.
7SLOTH:I understand, author. Thank you for taking the time to read my review. I was pretty emotional based on this review. This review should be taken with a grain of salt. As I spewed things, I disliked and wasn't as objective. Regardless, keeping working hard. I think you'll be able to be full time. if you haven't already.