Review Detail of WriterTheos in The Divine God-(Slice of LIfe)

A very good first chapter. I liked the quick writing and smooth flow of the chapter, and also the concepts that it brings. The mc and setting is established nicely, as well as the goal. However, there are many Grammer and punctuation mistakes. A common one I saw was switching from first person to second person and third person in writing a lot. This can be confusing for readers. Also, the capitalization of the first letter in sentences does not happen, and also periods are missing a lot. Other than these mistakes and a few others, it's a very well rounded first chap. Good luck!