Review Detail of _JMR_ in In Danmachi world with Obito's power
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Well, its an interesting idea...... and that's it. U say Obito's power, but there's only the fire style and sharingan, well u could say its just the beginning and there will be more, but things simply don't add up. As a teenager Obito posed a challenge to the Fourth Hokage. As an adult, he defeated Root's most skilled ninja, and simultaneously held his own against Konoha's top shinobi and Killer B. Obito was proficient in taijutsu as he fought on par with Kakashi on several occasions, while controlling the outcome of their last fight. His physical strength and speed were great enough to lift Konan by her throat with one hand while gravely injured, impale someone by running his arm through their chest, and keep up with Naruto's Nine-Tails Chakra Mode, but can't kill a Monster on the first floor without a weapon ? Getting stronger ? I would say, that he is already the strongest adventurer out there and yet u fail to portray him as such. In addition to that I have to say, that the grammar here is pretty bad. There is simply no conjugation in here. I simply can't understand why u would write a story in English when u apparently fail to use it appropriately. Everything would be better with better grammar, I mean almost everything mentioned above is still easily changeable and not really that bad and could be enjoyable, but the grammar really ruins it all. Missing conjugation is something that I can't overlook and the lack of it disturbs the reading flow. Well overall its a 1.4
In Danmachi world with Obito's power
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For the strength, I just explain it on the newest chapter that I just upload few minutes ago. Briefly tho but maybe that can answer the question. For grammar, I already write it in the synopsis that my grammar is bad, English is not my first language, heck it's even not my second language, so if you decided to read it, that was the risk. For why I write it in English when my grammar is bad, I just want to.. And maybe with that, my English is become better? Idk..
well honestly its not really with obitos power. its a hard nerfed version. adds to that the fact that his annoying behavior an d jealous forever alone persona got mixed together with the person ho transmigrated(cant call him/it MC since he rather supports bell since thinks he should support the original MC for queestionable reasons). also he got the damaged body from midnaruto but without really a big bonus for it but rather a crippled body which he just accepts sadly. could have at least looked for a healing elixier which regenerates. even if he cant buy it cause he is poor but he would get a goal to reach. Sadly he also cant get a falna and the boni from it. till now it really seems like mostly canon which is slightly altered and an added support character with existential crisis because there was missing drama(yep reason behind no falna) :/