Review Detail of VWjam in The Devil's Prey

The writing quality is ok. It sometimes switches between past and present tense which is a little startling, but it doesn't subtract from the overall plotline. The story is easy to digest but some of the scenarios are wordy. If the grammar is cleaned up and the sentences are a little more compact, the reading experience will be more enriched. Also, it was a little difficult to picture the city setting as a whole. But the characters are ok. They're still developing, so I don't have a favorite character yet (but I do dislike--in the sense that I am enjoying the plotline--the ML. He's just doing what he needs to do, but, like, still...). There's a lot to look forward to.