Review Detail of David_Orchard in Necromancer Of The Shadows

I have now read up to chapter 100 with the intention of reading on, but I do have some grievances. Firstly, Evans's name gets used way too much. It breaks the story when you are reading "Evan" what feels like every other word in some paragraphs. Secondly, some of the sentences need commas. I realize this is just me being a grammar snob, but it becomes distracting sometimes. Finally, sometimes I feel like the stuff that Evan says is almost too childish or poorly structured enough for me to be like wow. My biggest example of this is when he is talking about Lady Luck's Temple. The phrasing is bad. Otherwise, the novel shows promise for my current trope vibes. I will continue reading with the hope that the author gets better. I understand that English is a brutal language to learn, so overall you are doing a good job. Thank you for writing. I look forward to reading further. I will try to update my score if my opinions change or there is improvement