Review Detail of T_Tan in Necromancer Of The Shadows

I only read up to chapter 11. In my opinion this novel have potential, not bad. But i don't like the story because author use 3rd person perspective, just try to count how many times author write "Evan" in a single chapter, personally i don't feel connected to the story because of this. Also i feel like author need to use more punctuation, i notice author rarely use coma (,) sign on his story which made the paragraf feel chaotic. I also don't like how author do chapter 1, the sacrifice part on chapter 1 is unnecessary for me, and its better if you put it in chapter 10. In my opinion you made chapter 2 to chapter 9 as a flashback is a bad choice. I mean why would you give readers an 8 chapter long flashback right from the start? its unnecessary, everyone can literally read chapter 1 and jump to chapter 10 immediately and can still understand the story. Its a bad start in my opinion. You should know that you need to make the story as interesting as possible on early chapter to make people stay and hyped for the next chapters, but here i am dropping on chapter 11 before even i know mc new power after the sacrifice. I hope my review can help you to get better. good luck author.