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ok, normally I tell people to be more descriptive, but in this case, you go on for so much that most chapters so far (35) feels like death by PowerPoint with filler content and little dialog. female descriptions could be better they feel 2D
The Chosen's Odyssey
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for an example on how to set things up, I'd recommend the first demonic dragon, or blessed by the night. those two books do a good job of keeping explanations short and sweet. Your novel is good. I'll still read it, but if you write another novel, try and keep the explanations as simple as possible. Remember, the average attention span is about 5 minutes.
Unorthadox01:Thank you for taking the time to read my novel and leave a review. I’m always trying to improve, so I’ll definitely work on this element of my writing. I’m by no means a professional so any other advice you may have will be appreciated.