Review Detail of tyr12345 in GoT: Break the Wheel
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for those who want to know: story development 2 the rest 4 the beginnin of the story is quite boring and there are many oc characters. after about 20 to 30 chapters the story gets better and is quite enjoyable. From chapter 130 onwards the story development is taking a turn for the worse. The mc overcomes his main antagonists off without a struggle. The blackfires were established as a bigger enemy with the backing of the golden company. They were brought down by some assasin and then they were just integrated with the mc. Viserys had the potential to be this character in the family of the mc, that would betray him and give the mc problems by being jealous, … But then he just said, that his canon behaviour was just an act and he is fully ok with being cucked by the mc. In the end the mc gets all the women, that the author wants him to have and the story is being developed in such a way, that the mc has no problems. Overall that makes the story boring in the later stages and unsatisfying
GoT: Break the Wheel
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I kind of like this review, actually tells me what you think instead of just spamming one word. To be honest though it was started in the early days of my Fan Fic spinning mind so its to be expected to have a lot of nonsense in my opinion. But the Blackfyre thing was originally much different, but there was never a plan to see them in Westeros. I wanted it to be like how the North and Robb Stark seemed like they had something going only to trip on themselves and shatter like glass. I could admittedly have done it different but in the end they rejoin the fold as allies or die off as they are a long term threat. But thanks for the feedback, I think this is the first 'real' feedback I have ever really gotten to be honest.