Review Detail of Majer3 in Zurong- Quest for Eternal Fire

This following review has been published by Wise Entities Sect Academy (a writer community). https://wise-entities-padoga.webnode.page/sect-academia/ Ahhh proper morning tea in imperial style. What?? Tribes sects political boogaloo. Let see. -Light novel starts with the word mom/5. -In a strange world of battles and magical myth things and gods the world building starts with the parent and child discussion about the world. Is it the definition of the development or how MC will develop remains to be seen. Also talking with the children about THE LORD OF DARKNESS!!! 5/5 early pedagogics. -Best practice pedagogics continue in form of a ill thought suicide 5/5. Could of maybe written more reasons why any woman would be that stupid to kill herself because of some random scumbag ex. It really ads to the bad parenting genre and MC will grow mest up. -After this the world building becomes very thin and dialogue rules the writing almost entirely. -Dialogue technique could be better, there is mentions of opening door or some other things in passive form in brackets, you could check how these things are written in almost any fantasy book. -[phone disconnected] vrs "Mc Mac Mc looked at his phone from last century that his stupid parents that died had got him from the flea market. In irritation he saw that the phone was disconnected again, and he could not call to helpdesk because the phone was useless. Mc Mac Mc decided to stay inside whole day and eat ice cream instead. * Fuck it * Mc thought. (Albeit my example is some stupid shit I wrote while being tired at morning , the point is that you can drop all meta data of personal feelings and thoughts what people are having when something happens and not just passively use bracketed actions. Those are only used in mangas when they want to cover some space with text so there is less things to draw.