Review Detail of Sacoguns in MY RUTHLESS VAMPIRE

I read your book to date, which is 23 chapters. Before my review, I request that you stop leaving advertising comments on gift comments of other author’s chapters. It is rude and annoying. It is not a practice done by good authors. Review: Your storyline is new compared with the many books I have read. However, it lacks in maturity. The sentences are often “choppy” and do not flow well. The story is rushed, so you don’t get a feel for the surroundings. The first chapters representing 7+ years reads more like a synopsis. Take your time to develop the story. You want to create a book that draws people back to it and entices readers to not only come back, but pay coins and drop gifts. At present, as an experienced reader of many books, this will not be a book I keep in my bookshelf.