It was an interesting read for me, it's actually good and has a lot of potential. Though, it's fast paced especially the 1st chap... It's also not that detailed enough and it makes reading really confusing. But it csn be edited and you will still Improve in the future, keep up the good work!
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LIKESerby:Thanks! I'll try to rewrite the prologue so that it doesn't seem like it's rushed.