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This is an interesting story. The plot has my attention and the characters are relatable. I would work a bit on the grammar (capitalization) and add more description to the story (describing how people look, what the environment looks like, emotions, physical feelings, thoughts of characters). Best wishes author.

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military girl stuck with Mafia System

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Thank you for advice I'll focus on that❣️