Review Detail of But_Frey in House of Shadows (No more)

This is a review of chapter 1 since that is all that is currently out. I didn't know what to expect going into this. But in the end, I came out satisfied. From an enjoyment point of view, I think this story has a lot of potential right off the bat. I am curious to see how the two will grow their relationship. And I NEED to know more about what lies in the astral state. Those entities are set up to be great threats so you better bring out their full horror! From a grammatical point of view. I think it's nearly perfect as is. The only thing I could be picky about is some small grammar points like punctuation and spelling. Some words could've also been used better but it still is fully comprehensible. I think proofreading once or twice will make this the best up-and-coming story!