Review Detail of Rin_Nurnia in Heartless Immortal

To be honest, there are two things you need to fix. Firstly, the use of punctuation for some of the dialogues, it'd be better if you insert commas. Secondly, you always repeating the action but also including it in your dialogue e.g. He sighed. "Sigh..." In this situation, if you already wrote the character's action, you don't need to express it in the dialogue because readers could tell the character was sighing