Review Detail of PerditaTritonia in 0kay

First of all, my review is focused on technicality because this story has amazing potential. I would hate it, for this to not be near perfect. Concept : 9/10 - not doing spoilers; just going to mention that the lore is rich - potential to great is evident Setting: 8/10 - it's descriptive enough to know which place looks like what; only issue is, ease for reader to distinguish between the two worlds Characters: 9/10 - they're relatable - a bit of distinction among different characters' manner of speaking would help the reader differentiate between characters. (some conversations, if read aloud, sound a bit monotonous) Summary: The story itself can be outstanding! My issue tends to revolve around technicalities. Ex. Punctuations, grammar, spelling, etc. (a critical eye for an outstanding story) I do apologise if I sound a bit harsh. I get strict on stories that can achieve near brilliance. Keep up the good work!!