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Although only 4 chapters when I am writing the review, I can say that this FF deserves 5 stars. Writing quality, Update stability, Development, etc. are quite good. There's no problem in these areas. I will see about World Background as Author publishes more chapters. What I am slightly disappointed about is that the interaction between the MC and his parents. It is clear that the time before Hogwarts is pretty fast faced, just summary of how he is preparing for the future. And I am not against it. On top of that, once Hogwarts arc starts, we will get to even less interaction between his parents and him. So, what you can do is, in between the summary you are giving to us, you can include small flashbacks to show how exactly the interaction between his parents and him goes. Like, you said that his father propsed his mother at Tower Bridge. And how they decided the names of their children based on this event. So, you could have introduced a flashback of that interaction. Like, the 3 of them were sitting on the couch in front of the fireplace in one winter and in-between some minor talks, MC asked his father how he propsed to his mother. Like this, a picture of he spends time with his family appears in our minds along with showing the characters of him and his parents. And this isn't my desire to read some fluffs speaking, Author. Absolutely not. Anyway, good luck and I hope you dump 100 Chapters tomorrow. Just kidding. Hahahaha...

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Potterverse: A Wizrard's Tale

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Thank you for sharing your thoughts. The thing is I don't know if I can write the romantic scene as of now. Once I get the hang of my writing or as a trial, I will put this scene of his parents sharing the story with him in flashback.