Perfect development in both the characters and stories, amazing grammar (which I seldom find these days), and a hooking plot overall. I wasn't expecting much at first, but after reading through the chapters, I became more and more sucked in. The only small complaints I have are the bunched paragraphs (it makes it a bit hard to read through) and a few writing errors here and there, but that's pretty much nothing. Besides that, a perfect book. I truly hope you continue with this! I can't wait to read more of your writing :)
Harleeyah24
Liked it!
LIKEnot bunched up chapters, but bunched up paragraphs. maybe limit the paragraphs to 3 or 5 sentences long?
Harleeyah24:Thank you so much for your review! And by “bunched up chapters” do you mean that the chapters are too lengthy? I should reduce the lengths?