Review Detail of PacificIslander in Reborn in So I'm a spider so what Z

I just read chapter 2 so I'm gonna leave an honest review of what was so far the grammar, is bit jumbled over the place. by that I mean that it's great at some points and gets weird as hell like "I'm a fuck puppy" the lack of capitalization in the story is kinda bad too everything else is ok I guess lol