Review Detail of Bardok32123 in May I see your panties hohoho

- The writing quality is low, there are no spacing for paragraphs. -as it’s a new book I can’t really rate the update stability -The story is very interesting, what you’ve written so far seems more like an overview of your story, with just the first two chapters alone you could make 14 or so decent sized chapters if you go into detail( slice of live interactions etc). - The character design is fine, if you write a more detailed and complete story I would love to read the interactions between characters. -There are some inconsistencies in the world background but if you can explain them, like you did with Madaras reason for rebelling, then it will be Epic! Overall a great story board/overview of your story and I can’t wait to read a more detailed and comprehensive version of it. Keep up the Great work, thank you for sharing your story with us.