Review Detail of BlackMango in Temporal Pearls

I’d give an honest review. I really enjoy this book. It has a nice concept, good world building and the main character is well thought out. Most other characters don’t have much depth to them but it’s understandable, it’s a game with many players. I would say that I didn’t like the story development that much. It’s the classic “new power up, stronger adversaries”. How can he clash with an ancient dragon here but is scared of a baby one there. He would fight toe to toe with the strongest people in one place but go somewhere else that should on the same level but meet much stronger opponents. I know it’s for the story but I don’t like it. He can’t be losing every other mental battle, how would any other person survive on the continent if that was the case. I am also frustrated by the horrible editing further into the book, especially in the privileged chapters. These things make or break your book. Do better. I would writing a book soon and I know my review may seem harsh, but take it as constructive criticism. I do like your book hence my incessant support.