Review Detail of Scorpious_star in The Wizard of The Seas

When reading the story the only problem I had was the POV. Sometimes while I am in the middle of the chapter it gets a little confusing as the POV is not very clear. The writing style is dofferent but the formation of sentences can difinitely be worked on. For example, when writing a dialogue try mentioning the emotion in which the characters says it. It makes it easier to understand the emotion your characters feel during the conversation. Try explaning the body langugae too. For instance, *he walked away lazily, swaying side to side as if he were drunk...* this shows that the character is not very interested in his/her surroundings. Although your punctuations are good. The story is definitely a lot more than one can expect from it.