The pacing feels rushed, or maybe it's just me that liked slow-paced stories better. I could feel that the story was written from the heart, but it could be better with help of an editor. You might want to read (and steal) techniques to write dialogue from other writers. All in all, I have fun reading. (≧◡≦)
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