Review Detail of HandsomeWriter in The daily life of an adventurer

There is a noticeable improvement in quality as the chapters progress. Descriptions and dialogue are better, you get a better sense for the environment in latter chapters. My critiques are that the story feels all over the place and it takes a while to get into what it should be about. It took around 5 chapters to get to the game, and while that would be fine in a typical book webnovels tend to be a lot faster paced. The first five chapters feel like it was becoming a detective story. Sean's attitude seemed to vacillate between meek and passive-aggressive and I feel as though the abuse leveled his way was somewhat unbelievable. To be kicked by a game store employee after being beaten up feels like it's laying it on too thick. The things I feel you can improve on are scene descriptions. If you work on that for a bit I'm sure there'll be a noticeable improvement in the quality of your story.