Review Detail of Tangerqueen in Bloody Saint

Overall a very promising story! The beginning began with an exciting plot line, and the subsequent chapters were also cliffhangers in their own rights. However, I would advise for you to proofread a bit (I gave writing quality a 4/5). Especially, most sentences had capitalization errors, and there were often issues with punctuation as well. I think reading over your chapters once after writing them would help improve these errors drastically. But other than that, pacing and story design is great! Good luck!