Review Detail of Dark_Path_007 in THE BIG BAD BOY

Ok guys, thanks for the support I've received up till this point in the novel. And since it's getting nearer to the end of the first part of the novel, I would like to ask if there are any improvements I can make to better my writing. I have noticed that my biggest problems lie in updating stability and world background. So please give me constructive criticism and any advice you can provide.