Review Detail of MWse in Altered plane: I am a boss class monster

Your work is much better than mine. Besides some minor grammar mistakes that can be easily overlooked, there seems to be no problem whatsoever. I can say for sure that you found the "sweet spot" between describing the environment where the action happens, the relation between the characters, and the dialogue. And, yes.. the description is top-notch. Nothing too detailed, but neither missing. I suggest that you think about having some scenes where the characters chat/do their hobbies and let us know their personality better/get closer to them. But make sure it's interesting by adding something fun or intriguing.