Review Detail of ThePotatoKing in APRIL FOOL'S KILLER (BOOK 1): APRIL KILLS FOOLS
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I read the entire story and this is my review so far. This story... was a bit too macabre for me in its description of the horrors that the main character had to go through. The story itself was also quite short. While there is a lot of shock value and explicit scenes depicted I believe that the story itself needs further elaboration. More depth into the main character's psyche and her inner world might help. Currently this is less of a story and more of a draft. Maybe its just because I am used to longer stories but that's just my opinion. What I mean is that each story needs to have a flowing narrative which includes rising action, the climax and the aftermath. While there is a lot of rising action, which describes what the main character had to go through, her life within time-skips to Mike's death and her becoming a goddess... there is no climax as such... We are not given the satisfaction of her actually going out and getting her revenge, of following the story of her pursuing the cult and taking it down, one fool at a time. That way, as readers we can get some release and feel the revenge. What I will praise about this book is its writing quality. The sentences and prose are well structured and rich with detail and reading them is an absolute delight. I guess overall its a pretty great concept, my only complaint being that this story seems to have ended in a rushed manner, without achieving its full potential.
APRIL FOOL'S KILLER (BOOK 1): APRIL KILLS FOOLS
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Also her abuse by the hands of her parents and the maid climaxed in the 13 Chambers chapter and in the chapter Charred Demise, it climaxed to her sweet revenge. Where she ended all three poetically at once. As she readyed herself since she was seven years old. At 8 years old, she became an avid reader, and you know what they say about readers. She matured beyond her years. At 12 years old, her plan was set in motion successfully by reading such books as Art of War. In her inner monologue in chapter one, she explained what she had gone through and her plan to remedy this which was rising action. And we learn through a different lens, how criminal her parents really are and how wide the cult really is in Chapter two. In Chapter three, the story climaxes to her revenge to her sicko parents and maid. In the 13 Chambers chapter, her whole life was from her first to her 12th birthday was laid bare. Yes she is fully aware of the cult's existence but she chooses to hide in plain sight. She is after all a teenager. All she wanted was her freedom and being able to go to school. She had even more than that. She was a billionaire heiress with a best friend who secretly loves her. High School life to College life was explored as she was easily the smartest person in any room in the chapter Jean Thoby. She was always 10 steps ahead of everyone. She was satisfied with Mike and his parents. She was satisfied with high school and college as long as Mike was there in the chapter Greek Life and Dreamscapes. Once he was taken out of the picture, rising action. It climaxed to her revenge on those frats on her 18th birthday. Yes it's definitely intense. After losing the one person she truly dedicated herself to, who she was tethered to, she performed an exceptional sacrifice through a ritual which catapulted her to Deity status. Now, she no longer sets Fools on fire but she makes them relive what they had done to their victims on April Fool's Day. Yes you are right I have added more chapters to it on the other platforms such as Inkitt and Wattpad. Since I have it in completed status on here, I cannot add more chapters. But I don't want to over spill as to instill mystery. I still want to have enough mystery left for the other books. đ„°
It's a trilogy. This is the first book. The other two books will focus on her Goddess status and how she will cope/deal with Mike's 'death' and the Cult. As stated before noone leaves the cult. Maybe a Goddess can rectify that. I have to leave some more tea/conflicts, resolution, or cliffhanger for the other books. Thank you so much for the reviewđ„°