Review Detail of aiden_rivera in I Got Reincarnated as a Dungeon Core in a Tiny Island in the Ocean

you just need better transaction? dialog? it's mainly about how they talk like in the beginning he was talking about 7th period and then out of nowhere please stop and the format of the text is weird but if you fix the dialog/make it smoother like if you built suspense about the bullies it would have been bussen he'll you don't have to change the text format you just need smoother dialog and it be a 4 star story (don't take me seriously I suck at any reviews and please don't get mad sorry if it did make you mad)