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Review Detail of TangyChili in Otaku In The Animverse As Shallot

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Writing Quality: 1 Stability: 5 Story development: 2 Character design: 3 World Background: 3 So, my computer got fucked and the review I was writing got deleted and I can't be bothered to write it all again so I'll summarize it. Writing quality is just bad. Poor vocabulary from the autho, which I'm assuming will be excused by something along the lines of "english isn't my first language" so whatever I guess. The dialogue in the story is the biggest turn-off ever. It's like reading a conversation in a roleplaying discord server or something. Momo: *blushes* Lucifer: *goes in for a handshake* The story development is also disappointing. The MHA arc can basically be summarized as: MC gets OP, shows off, gets girl, leaves world. Another complaint I have is why tf does the MC make a JARVIS for himself. He can literally will any skill/ability into existence, but instead makes JARVIS make the power. Why? "Hey JARVIS, make X skill for me." ????????? what's the point. Why does he need a middle man to make the skills for him. Omnificence doesn't even require the user to have to understand the intricacies of the skill he's making Anyway, next he goes to the Solo Leveling world. Now take what I'm about to say with a grain of salt because we're only one chapter in the arc atm. Why doesn't he take Momo out with him? why leave her in his pocket dimension? why does he not give her any powers and instead gives one to Izuku? Why does he simp more for Izuku than his actual girlfriend? talking about Momo, MC never went to visit her parents and he just takes her to another world. Momo herself, seems to not have any attachment to her family and just leaves with MC without a second thought. However, as I mentioned before, we're only a chapter in so maybe my questions will be answered, but honestly, at this point, it could probably go towards the pokemon waifu route.

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Otaku In The Animverse As Shallot

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WeAnoz
WeAnozAuthorWeAnoz

I honestly Agree with your review. Thank you And I Appreciate the help 😌

WeAnoz
WeAnozAuthorWeAnoz

Yes I see what you mean. I May have rushed MHA way too Much. that’s purely on me, Momo will be seen in future chapters and don’t worry She does Gain More Powers. My first Language is Polish And No I’m not gonna use this as an excuse for my poor writing quality.

WeAnoz
WeAnozAuthorWeAnoz

And I get what you mean by the roleplaying Part that you mentioned. I’m slowly switching over to using “_” instead of Name: and then *Action* Ty For the Help your review is the Most honest If you do continue reading further Please let me know if you see any mistakes and I’ll sure to change them

TangyChili
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can you give me your discord? (username and code)

WeAnoz:And I get what you mean by the roleplaying Part that you mentioned. I’m slowly switching over to using “_” instead of Name: and then *Action* Ty For the Help your review is the Most honest If you do continue reading further Please let me know if you see any mistakes and I’ll sure to change them
WeAnoz
WeAnozAuthorWeAnoz

Discord: PAT🤫#0668

TangyChili:can you give me your discord? (username and code)