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I think a more effective beginning would've been Everyone waiting for Natasha to show up with the groom waiting at the altar. Starting the main character off in tears without setting the scene properly can lose a reader. In the future ask yourself what is the character responding to and is logical and within their character to do so

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Accidentally Married To Mr. Billionaire

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Angelica2511
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Thank you for the suggestion. Everyone has different points of view. I am satisfied with the beginning.

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Me too

Angelica2511:Thank you for the suggestion. Everyone has different points of view. I am satisfied with the beginning.