Review Detail of RyanSe4 in Valerian, The Legendary

The story is good overall, and I do like how the characters are portrayed, however the actual quality and consistency of the writing is definitely the biggest drawback of this story. A few time skips were not even mentioned, entire days unaccounted for with no mention of them passing, the tense changes from past to present regularly, and the usage of commas is excessive and doesn't make sense often. I do enjoy the story a lot- it would just be a lot better if the actual writing were at a higher level.