Review Detail of bibiyenini in The Mafia Couple

Upon reading the novel, I'll drop by an honest review of what I notice in the author's execution and writing. First, the synopsis isn't really catchy. Yes, some authors tend to place questions to pique the interest of the readers at first read, but remember, synopsis is the THIRD thing readers will see. First is the cover, and second is the title. If those three correlates with each other, then you'll be able to attract the readers on your first chapter. Second, the first chapter is too quick. Make sure you have spaces in between the words. Don't crowd them in one paragraph. Make sure to take down unnecessary linking words, such as was, were, is and are. To make your writing smooth, you need to reduce those words to limit. The punctuation is an issue here, too. E.g. "Thanks," said Ashton. [Make sure you place comma before the end quotation mark] Third, the chapters felt really long but short on the site because there are so many linking words that rubbed off the sense of a sentence. When writing, make sure to reduce all kinds of link. Redundancy, mostly, is the result of this. Also, make sure to be consistent upon showing than telling. Describe the actions, not telling the actions. Fourth, maybe one of the few common reminders in Webnovel, changing the title. The first thing that comes to mind of the readers whenever they read the title was... "How interesting it is and compelling than other works?" Make sure you're not vague. I'm not saying the title isn't that catchy, but let me tell you this: the market of Webnovel isn't going to grow with the indefinite titles. You have to make sure to expound and in a few words, explain what the story is about. I hope this review will help you! Best of luck on future endeavors!