Review Detail of OsirysOsprey04 in LazyShadows 1

I’ve read the available chapters and it time for a review. Writing quality: while it’s readable there are too many mistakes, the most relevant problem is your grammar. You should make a grammar check of your chapter, there are many free option to do so. This kind of error get annoying if encountered many times and it easily break the flow of the novel. Updates: just the start, don think too much of it.. bring your quality up first and then focus on stability Story development: The concept used is interesting and even if a easy story it’s well brought up. A little early to judge so I won’t say more. Character design: Well made, there are some loopholes but just the fact of not having clichés or developing them in original ways make them good. Just pay attention to keep the characters behaviour stable, it can change there has to be a reason. ( ps. The mc has passed 12 years in bliss without getting a head start, he was an adult already in mentality.. as of now while he’s not an idiot his still a little dull.) World background: You have wasted must potential. The arts of mortal kind never used?, sky arts are grass but earth are leprechauns and people kill for it? grandmaster level figures stay in a village? A little more description of the scenery would be appreciated. And more inconsistencies. All in all, it ’s not bad as a first work but there’s a lot to improve. Keep it up and get better author.