Review Detail of conce_aled in The Succubus Series

What a fabulous start! I am hooked and very excited to see where this will go! I really like the blunt style of these first chapters. The sense of betrayl comes through in a very brutal kinda way that more flowery prose would have softened too much I think. The return to her body scene as she's discovering her change was gritty and I really liked it! Loved the details of the flies and the blood dried. So often those magical transformations are too neat and pretty and I think this story is very well served by the darker tone. There could be a little more polish and flushing out of back ground, but I really really do like the bared bone feel of your writing. It's visceral and darkly innocent in a way. Can't wait to read more! As time and muse allows of course.