Mostly fine, though Itachi is quite intelligent and wouldn't do certain things that he does in your novel. Also, some of the reactions are too strong for someone like Itachi to make.
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LIKEI appreciated the feedback but im going to have to disagree with some things you have said. You need to understand that in this novel, itachi is NOT the same itachi, he does not have the same strength he had before, right now hes in a weak body with no powers, some strong reactions are due to him being in a completely different world where danger lurks everywhere, his intelligence and confidence were backed up by his strength back in naruto. Without his strength itachis confidence is lacking , thats why u might seem him “ dazed “ or surprised, hes in a new world with new stuff, this is not what hes used too.