Review Detail of McCrunch in Origin Court: Accepting Disciples With A System

I would say solid story. The main character keeps his wits about him and is cool and collected. the story overall is good. I would say work on your Grammer and flow, I would often have to stop and think on a certain line of text as the syntax is very unique, it's not all bad it just breaks the immersion every now and then. I also make Grammar mistakes So I won't judge on that to much. The cussing is hilarious, again very unique. I Personally enjoyed the story so far.