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Review Detail of SenorSleep in Game End System

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SenorSleep
SenorSleepLv102yrSenorSleep

This work of yours is by no means awful. It's just you need to re-edit things and pay attention to mixed up words. Another problem of yours is the same as the author I've reviewed before. That is, your large paragraphs. You'll need to split it up. The reason is that not everyone has a large attention span. This solution accommodates those who have short attention spans.

Game End System

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