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This story is good despite the obvious flaws. But there is one major thing that the author messed up and can no longer fix. The mc. Although I think his personality is fine and it’s somewhat what I prefer but you can write a story around such a character. He essentially doesn’t talk, he cares about nothing besides power, the only conversation we get because of this are just information dumps because the only time he talks is literally when another character stronger than is forcing him too or he actually needs something. Most of the story is spent with him in isolated training so there not much to write on that which just creates a bunch of time skips. Again he doesn’t care about anything expect power so he will not even entertain something if doesn’t make him stronger. Despite all this huge flaws you could have made this a better story if you changed the writing style. You could have kept the same mc but instead of making him the main focus you should have made the side characters the main focus. Kinda like Overlord did because the story simply wouldn’t be as interesting if they didn’t. And that’s you should have did. Of course it’s too late your already almost a thousand chapters in. But I guess if you make another story this is something you should think about. All in all I would it has good grammar but in terms of quality it’s about average if not less. Character designs are ok nothing major but still there. Story development I would give a 0 if I could because although I like it but from a story standpoint it’s just doesn’t work. Background is talk about but in terms of being fleshed out it’s not but it has one

Sword God in a World of Magic

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