Review Detail of zenop91 in The Puppet MC: Adriel’s Life is Controlled by Everyone Around Him
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hello author, I think what your trying to write is kinda naive right now, it's okay to have preference but I would suggest you to make the Mc much more better and smart it feels like the mc is an object for the girls to use... he just feels like a dumb mc... I would suggest that you should rewrite it whole with much more mc things taking place and making a world with explaining powers and then building up his yandere story. I do think you have an amazing mind and story for yandere types... although this is all my opinion. I hope to that you make a lot of growth with this story... ( this all is just my opinion... this is your novel author do as you like with it ). :) A 5/5 for the novel as I think making yandere requires a lot of effort.
The Puppet MC: Adriel’s Life is Controlled by Everyone Around Him
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ohkk, thank you for explaining because I think many people after reading this would try the novel as it clears away the misunderstanding that the Mc will remain the same. Character development is necessary for a character I completely agree with you. It is just that the novel felt kinda rushed and the world building too was not enough. I hope you will take into account the missing things and put up an great novel. wishing you best of luck. 😁👍
Carrara:I'm planning on providing additional details as his power grows, and as he becomes more aware of his abilities, his personality undergoes a transformation. This will serve as a plot twist, and I appreciate you taking the time to review my work.