Review Detail of Braggski in Bird of Hermes [Familiar of Zero]

Plese continueee, I am quite fascinated by the first 2 chapters

the mc is Odell right?

Ordell* But yeah, that's his name.

AUthor, maybe you should state that its NOT alucard the MC, the "Bird of Hermes is my name, is a reference to alucard" Maybe saying that you found it cool? some readers seems to be confused and may not read past the first few chapters (Their lose). Also, do point out for those saying that MC is a simp to Louise... She literally created him when she summoned her, so to him, she is his goddess, his creator and his master.

Will you add Louise mother and her sister in the hárèm ?

Just to be sure there won't be yuri right ?

I don't plan on it... for now.

Well as long as you include MC in there then there won't be probleme unless you make a yuri scene without MC

Butter I don't why anyone didn't write this 😂

It's good so far. It's readable, you have the characters' personalities right so far, and it has an alright word count. My main concern is the pacing. It's slow, am I'm afraid you might lose interest in this story.

I really don't like that you used the iconic line of Alucard and he is not the MC.

indeed

bread

Bred