Review Detail of DeMetrius in MMORPG: Rebirth as an Alchemist

!!!There are Spoilers ahead!!! I saw this on an unspecified website and saw the incredibly poor review. It was rated 3.9 but the premise of the story hooked me on the spot (reincarnation novels are a guilty pleasure of mine, add in the mmorpg vr aspects then I give those a try, harems are a no-no), so I decided to give it a try, and it did not disappoint me. Things that are Good: 1. Story – the plot is good and incredibly easy to understand. Guy wants to get rich and have revenge on those who wronged him in his past/ future life, so he plays the game. His end goal? I don't know. 2. Characters – some character are believable, some not so much (because of their mannerisms and appearances). But I do like most of them. I also like that the MC isn't a super handsome, every girls' panties drop as soon as they see him, guy (we got a different character for that), but it was just in the realm that he is a looker and his fame was quite high, which meant that everyone now sees him as somebody "worthy" to stand with them (his classmates are rich and spoiled, while some are bootlickers while some are just in need of somebody strong in game to play with). I also like Evie and the implication that she's a spy for the country, or that's a mistake on the author's wording? She's also a good future partner for the MC because they are somewhat similar. Honorable mentions are Isolde cause she's cool as hell, Ragnar because the man is too handsome that he went for an Orc character, and Leonel my boy. 3. Character Development – super good! Most people don't change after a single talk that just wakes them up to reality, and so does people who their whole life has been fed with a silver food change for the better. People change when they encounter problems in life, whether for good or bad. One example is Leonel, who is naive and an overall good guy. Due to his helpful and caring nature, he is often exploited for help, something his and Ren's (the MC) friends did. After realizing that his two friends might not be that friendly towards them, he just cuts them off and roasts one of them. Another example of character development to the bad route is Saya. She broke up with her boyfriend, Mike (both of them are friend with Leo and Ren), because he is too focused on climbing the guild hierarchy which meant that he has no time for his girlfriend, which she craves (understandable), and because he isn't famous enough for her despite his riches (b**ch). So she decides to try and make MC fall in love with her. 4. The world – the world is quite interesting, since author basically divided it into three regions that separate the poor, middle class, and the rich. I don't know how hard it is to run a country like that, but meh. Covenant, the vr game, is also really interesting. 5. Romance – romance is a hit or a miss in most novels because of the preferences of the reader, but I quite like the spice it adds in the mix. The MC has attracted quite a number of girls due to different reasons. Some because he is an overall amazing player and his charisma through it just draws them closer. Some because he is rich and famous. And some because he is helpful to them and is just an overall interesting guy. All in all, I cannot wait to see where this plot point goes. I'm rooting for Evie, lezgo. 6. It isn't Harem – need I say more? Things that are Bad: 1. Grammar – you need help author. It bogs down on your writing. 2. Wording – I don't know if this is included in grammar, but some sentences just make no sense at times and are confusing. Or is it just because since I read this at 2 o clock in the morning? 3. Pacing – I know that this story is just beginning and it needs quite some time for more build up since all of the players haven't attained phase 2(? Tier 2? Or something) of their characters. There is also the fact that some arcs are longer than the others, like the current "Get a Mask to disguise Ragnar because people are realizing who he is" quest. But speaking as a reader detached with all their biases, this might bore and turn off most readers because of its length and slow pace. Personally, I like slow burns, gives me more to read and it allows authors to dive deeper and showcase their characters. 4. POVs – weird one to include, but most readers just don't like it when the focus of some chapters is not on the MC. I've read many reviews from different novels that said they dropped that novel because the POV is not on the MC etc. And this novel has quite a lot of that. Personally, I like alternating POVs between different characters. 5. Sexism(?) – I read a review that the novel is sexist about the way the author portrays women. I don't know??? Just pointing this out. If it meant the Gambino family, where the cousin was about to attack Isolde for gender, then I kinda understand that but it is also in human nature to drag others down (not everyone) so that they can get what they want. So... trying to emotionally hurt someone through their gender is a nice strat ( I'm not saying people should do it because that in and of itself is fucked up), but when you're desperate and want something, you resort to unsavory methods. Maybe its the male gaze, where every guy looks at a particular girl and just wants her, like with Evie. Or Saya in general. Dunno. 6. Emotional Maturity – I also saw a post that said Ren is supposed to be this mature guy because he returned from his older self, which meant that he shouldn't be lusting over a 19 y/o and have his decisions be influenced by those particular emotions. Which is true, BUT you do stupid shit when you're in love (is he?), like saying something cringe in hind sight but cool at the moment. But then again, a few moments ago he is just a slave for a guild that basically plotted to kill him before returning back to his younger self. He dedicated himself to his job which led to MANY regrets, like blackmailing Evie for example. Which influences it? I also saw a part that said "Be a d**k to the possible fem lead because that's the only way to approach a girl", which, now that I read it, is quite obvious. BUT the situation also plays into part, they're dungeoning and this girl got kicked out by her guild, was saved by a bunch of randos from the opposing guild, brought her with them to continue exploring, then it turns out she was actually spying on them? I don't know about that commenter, but I would be a d**k as well, mentally mature or not, I have my limits. 7. "Shrewdness" of Covenants developers – its funny at first, but once it continued, it became annoying and an unbelievable safety net. You can't just add information about the game and say "tHe gAmE dEveLoPeRs aRe ShReWd tehe", no offense, but that's unbelievable, even for a fantasy novel. UNLESS, you have an explanation about that like Rebirth of the Strongest Guild Master and White Online. In the meantime, its annoying. 8. The World Chat commenters – just a pet peeve of mine, totally biased. 9. There are no plot points – I saw this in another review and... what??? I don't understand, but I'm throwing it here so that you are aware, dear author. There was also one that says that some parts are dragged on which ties in with my comment about pacing. Being an author must be hard huh? 10. Ren's hypocrisy – he says save money to Leonel, then spends money to buy a Limousine to fetch his parents. Someone also pointed this out. 11. Some cringe dialogue here and there 12. You should re-check your work – another review pointed out that you should read the sentences you write for your characters. 13. Lily and Michael – f*ck those two. Author, please do know that I like your work and want to see this novel become better. Some of these reviews are from personal thoughts while reading, and some are from reviews in unmentionable places. All of these are valid and taking them in stride and learning from all of it will allow you to grow better (not that I know since you have, like, 5 other novels), but please don't take reviews to heart, which you probably know already. Anyway, I hope you do your best.