Review Detail of Almarik_san in HP: What would you do if you were Snape in his time at Hogwarts?

It's hard to read, to author write 2 paragraphs to say the same thing. 3 sentences with the same meaning using synonyms. It give me headaches. I don't like the way the character think, it's not realistic, you can see the mind of the author, the plan behind it. Hopefully the author will learn from the critics and continue to write greater ff or original stories.