Review Detail of Dragon_FRUITs in In MHA with DnD Spells? (DROPPED)

Not to discourage you, but the beginning chapter is very bad. a sister dying and revenge, while telling from 3rd and 1 st POV. also the corresponding chapters, all feel like a mess actually. pls write a new better fanfic or even novel or even manga. Hope you get better at it. Just ignore my words.