Review Detail of S_Takeshi in Imagine Breaching the 4th Wall

First of all, it is an interesting concept. Normal slice of slight with an mc in something like a "lucid dream". The pace is relaxing and the characters are what you see in your everyday life. However, I don't get how the fourth wall is relevant to the story yet. Another bad point is your sentence structure. You are using too much "as" to describe actions and too many words are crammed into a paragraph. According to my ex-English lecturer. What you are doing is called "Word Diarrhoea" to her. Otherwise, It is a solid 4.8