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So writing quality is about average, didn’t really see to many typos or grammatical errors. Updating stability is average, about one or two chapters a week. World building and character design uses a well known preexisting world. Story development is where it tanked. It takes place with canon Naruto right after the academy, MC takes over the body after he dies in real world. Then the system initiated, normally I like these however this one is a depraved version. For those whom have seen one of the comments above regarding MC banging his own clones, this is true. However they failed to mention why. When MC gets his system, it tells him the first mission he has 30 minutes to bang Sakura when she has zero feelings for him. Reward is a skill to help with Shadow clones, failure is death. So his choice is to either trick/r@pe Sakura, figure a way around it or die. This is also not the only time something like this happens (with penalty being death/horrific). As nasty as it is to think of someone banging their own henged clones, that is still 10,000% more acceptable then MC going r@pist route. Chapter 45 actually has the system punish him by forcing dumb penalties on him while increasing his libido to the point it’s causing him insane pain (he literally starts smashing his face on the ground to distract the pain). He blacks out and then r@pes one of his classmates due to system removing his control. The penalty lasts for a week, at which point he has to abuse his date (again, forced to r@pe her the first time after the other classmate due to the system causing another blackout). Magic umbrella happens in chapter 47 to remove his r@pe actions from everyone’s knowledge except his own (all the previous other problems still persist) system gets an update to remove the psychotic aspect and we are left with a nasty taste in our mouths from the previous system’s actions. This is why we as readers should be able to add tags with justifications versus just having to leave very lengthy notes.

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Bro when you said the world building is where it tanks you forgot to mention the writer literally seems to have a very very basic understanding of how naruto actually works