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jeanpierregerardo
jeanpierregerardoLv52yrjeanpierregerardo

until the recent chapter you can notice the progress, it is not so fast the romance, since it is approached slowly, it would be good also that you make "pov" of the 7 "trinities". I can't say more until more chapters come out, that could show their progress with their training and the girls.

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Harem Overlord System(Re-written)

Abysalyounglord

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Abysalyounglord
AbysalyounglordAuthorAbysalyounglord

This is my first work so I am still inexperienced and also I have a problem with romance drama plots as you can see that's how it came out. By the way thanks for the advice , I need others opinions on the matter so I can know which part I improve...🤗

jeanpierregerardo
jeanpierregerardoLv5jeanpierregerardo

just something else(make a chapter 0 or auxiliary where you put the evolution of the protagonist with his powers, the power rank of that world, the list of the girls who appear so far, a little of what world is this, not for me, but for those who do not know the novel or the anime, among other things that surely someone will put in the comments saying(and how are the girls , in what scale is the protagonist, etc ))

Abysalyounglord:This is my first work so I am still inexperienced and also I have a problem with romance drama plots as you can see that's how it came out. By the way thanks for the advice , I need others opinions on the matter so I can know which part I improve...🤗
Abysalyounglord
AbysalyounglordAuthorAbysalyounglord

Thanks for your opinion I will do that when I get the time in a few days later.

Afonso_Aaron
Afonso_AaronLv5Afonso_Aaron

How big the hårèm going to be ?

Abysalyounglord:Thanks for your opinion I will do that when I get the time in a few days later.
MaTachin
MaTachinLv10MaTachin

you should add harem tag

Abysalyounglord:Thanks for your opinion I will do that when I get the time in a few days later.
Zzz_808
Zzz_808Lv3Zzz_808

why should it be placed that the title is already a harem overlord.

MaTachin:you should add harem tag
MaTachin
MaTachinLv10MaTachin

people search novel based on the novel tag duh

Zzz_808:why should it be placed that the title is already a harem overlord.
Zzz_808
Zzz_808Lv3Zzz_808

I never searched through tags, better write down specifically the world title, after all titles have the word harem.

MaTachin:people search novel based on the novel tag duh