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Rating: 4.2

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Jolan_HildebrandtLv11yrJolan_Hildebrandt

Here is where your falling down. 1. You keep dropping irrelevant facts into paragraphs. Keep everything filtered through the characters 2. Dilogue, if you wouldn't say it don't put it in your characters mouths. 3. Keep flow in mind. There are moments when your writing is smooth, and then it gets awkward back to smooth. Read aloud and ask yourself does it run across the tongue like silk or sandpaper

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Jude_K_1656

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Jude_K_1656AuthorJude_K_1656

I am requesting your comment to delete as this is not constructive criticism. Not a good critic at all. Do you have a degree in Psychology? I wonder. Did you have a chance to read the original format of Stephen King or James Patterson's book? You would be shocked, but their books sold tons of copies, thanks to their editor! And did you have books published in paperbacks and sold worldwide? I bet not. No one's a perfect writer regarding grammar, and the plotlines matter and how it touches a reader's heart and become your fan. I've written hundreds of books and sold worldwide in my country, yet I don't pull down a newbie since it is their trying moment to be discovered, not by your standard, that is, if you have. And with my first book here, I'm earning already. I like to write here because of the freestyle.

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