When I say review, it's actually an honest review of what I read about the plot, theme, synopsis, and even the first 3 chapters. First, I have a problem with the punctuation. It's disturbing to see punctuations not placed to their right places. Added to that is the capitalization of every sentence. E.g. "Thank you," Ashton said. [This sentence comprised of the correct punctuation and capitalization] Second, the synopsis can be written better and well. I understand you wanted to say that the female is not allowed to have a mate, but it can be worded and executed well. For it to be more smoothly readable, be careful with the organization of words. Try to read it again and again. If it sound clear and comprehensible, it's all set. Third, the market of Webnovel doesn't cater vague titles even if it has the catchy word on it i.e., Alpha, CEO, Billionaire or even system. I suggest, if you can do for your future works, to be definite of the title. Be straightforward! Fourth, you can opt to have more detailed and attractive cover to intrigue the readers. In that way, they would make it to the synopsis and the first chapter as well. Last, the first chapter shouldn't start with the information about a pack. You could add this ingredient inside the chapters for it to be executed and informed the readers well. Don't spoon feed readers with information RIGHT at the beginning. Might as well take up a lot of time and effort to have a good writing, but yours is already unique. A little tweak and you're good to go!
Mudita Upreti
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