Review Detail of FantasyBliss30 in Tell Me When The War Is Over: Napalm Skies

Great start to a novel. A very interesting premise of a missing sister with a hidden society involved. Has definite potential for a long web serial. Writing quality is very clean, just a few typos here and there. Only area where I feel there could be more polishing is the dialogue tags, but I will entirely leave it up to the author to make their choice. Another humble suggestion from an amateur author like me is to outline the novel first, outline the smaller episode, and then outline the chapters. That way the pacing will be smooth and consistent throughout. Overall, a great, fun read. Keep it up, dear author and thank you for your hard work.